Spooks

Dec. 13th, 2005 09:38 pm
alliecat8: (Dark)
[personal profile] alliecat8
I'm STARTING with the author's notes on this one, because it needs a heap o'explainin'! First, this is (just under the wire) birthday fic for [livejournal.com profile] holycitygirl, who requested Sawyer getting killed by tree frogs. (!) [livejournal.com profile] holycitygirl is a unique genius who makes me laugh and I adore her, so death-by-tree-frog it is (sorta!).

Second, this is about as Southern a fic as you can get. In my world, Sawyer grew up in the foothills of the Smokies, just outside of Knoxville. [livejournal.com profile] holycitygirl might be the only reader who can appreciate my Southernisms!

Title: Spooks
Character: Sawyer
Rating: Um, PG-13 for spookiness, I guess
Word Count: 973
Disclaimer: Only mine in my dreams
Warnings: Possible character death
Spoilers: None



Spooks always called to him.

When he was little, he used to take down his mamaw’s quilts, the ones she hung over the front windows like curtains, and drag them out to the screened porch. There was a cane-bottomed rocker on that porch, and an old wood burning stove that they never lit in the summertime, and if he pushed them close together and hung the quilts over them both, he’d have himself a tent. He could lie in that tent for hours, listening to the whispers and thinking things over, until he’d feel the weathered floorboards beneath him sag and smell cigarette smoke, and his papaw’s pea-gravel voice would say, “You playin’ possum again, boy?”

James wouldn’t answer at first because, sure enough, he was playing possum. Long as he was out here, pretending to be asleep, he didn’t have to be in the quiet of his own bed.

His papaw would grab hold of the rocker then, yanking it backward and burying James in musty, dusty cotton, and James hated it when that happened so finally, one night, he decided to quit playing possum and ‘fess up.

“I’m listenin’ to the spooks.” He stuck his head out from between the folds of his tent and blinked in the too-bright moonlight. “Hear ‘em?”

“Ain’t no such thing as spooks, son.” That sneer was in his papaw’s voice, the one that was always there whenever he used the word “son.” “Even if there was, spooks ain’t for hidin’ from. Spooks are for facin’ down, lookin’ straight in the eye.”

James wasn’t afraid of his papaw. Wasn’t afraid, even though he knew the old man hated him. He knew that every time he looked at him he saw James’ daddy, his real son. His son who shared James’ dimpled blond features, who’d used those looks to marry up, made something of himself, made his daddy proud and then went and shot it all to hell with two blasts of a gun. His papaw thought James’ daddy was a coward for turning that gun on himself, not on the man who deserved it. James wasn’t a coward like his daddy had been. He didn’t like it one bit that his papaw thought he was.

“I ain’t hidin’.” James scowled. “I’m just listenin.’ If I knew what they looked like, I’d find 'em and shoot ‘em down like a bear.”

His papaw snorted. “Son, you ain’t never shot no bear.” He grabbed a lantern from the peg beside the door. “C’mon, boy, we’re goin’ huntin’.”

James didn’t see his papaw’s shotgun anywhere in sight, so he was a little worried about this midnight hunting trip. But he wasn’t a coward, so he followed without saying a word. The screen door slammed behind them, bounced and slammed again, and something that might have been a raccoon scurried across the yard. The grass was cold and wet with dew under his bare feet as he ran to keep up with his papaw’s long strides. Moss and mud squished between his toes as they got closer to the river’s edge. The moon was so high that it almost looked like daytime, except that the water of the Little Pigeon River was blacker than the sky as it slid and gleamed over massive dark rocks. He stubbed his toe on one of the pebbles that littered the shore, but he didn’t cry out, didn’t remind his papaw that his mamaw didn’t let him come down here without shoes. James was tough, and he’d prove it.

“Spooks,” his papaw laughed, not a happy laugh but one that made James grit his teeth. “Look here, boy, them’s your spooks, right there.” He leaned over and set the lantern down on a rock, one that had a natural hollow in it that formed a pool of clear water. In the murky light James could see shapes like tiny fish swimming in the pool.

“Those’re tadpoles,” James said, a mite too scornfully, and earned himself a hard cuff to his ear.

“They’re your spooks, sure ‘nuff,” his papaw said, with another of those grinding laughs. He reached for the lantern and swung it upward, toward the overhanging branches of a looming hemlock. There, plastered against the tree bark as if they were stuck there with glue, were hundreds of little green frogs. The same kind of frogs that slithered up and down his bedroom windows after they’d had a spell of hard rain. “They’re just frogs,” James said, sullen now that he knew his papaw was playing tricks. He’d been ready to face his spooks, look ‘em in the eye, and all he got was frogs.

“Tree frogs. See what they’re doin’?” His papaw held the lantern closer to the branch. “They’re rubbing their back legs together. That’s the sound you hear. Ain’t no spooks in these parts, son. Just frogs. A big ol’ passel of frogs.”

***

The spooks still call to him. Even now, in another time and another place, a place about as far from the foothills of the Smokies as you can get. Ocean instead of river, jungle instead of forest, and James isn’t even James anymore, he’s Sawyer. Yet the spooks still call.

He lies in his tent, listening to the whispers. The whispers beckon him, calling him into the jungle. But almost no one goes into the jungle anymore. They don’t go now, since the Others discovered their camp, because going into the jungle means death. And yet the whispers still call to him, and beneath their song he hears his papaw’s voice. “Spooks ain’t for hidin’ from, son. Spooks are for facin’ down, lookin’ straight in the eye.”

“Ain’t no spooks in these parts,” he tells himself. “It’s nothin’ but frogs.” And he lets the jungle lure him in.


link to Prologue 2: Third Saturday in October

Date: 2005-12-14 04:32 am (UTC)
ext_16765: (Sawyer iam)
From: [identity profile] arabella-hope.livejournal.com
Yay, you're back! This was wonderful...I don't know that I've read any fics of Sawyer (James really) living with family after his parents died...and this was lovely!

The idea of the whispers in the jungle holding that double meaning to him...loved it!

Date: 2005-12-14 04:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com

I was just thinking about "Confidence Man," when James' mother said, "He'll think you're still with the grandparents." So, that's probably where he went after his parents died.

I'm so glad you loved it! Especially since this one was something completely different. :D


Date: 2005-12-14 04:38 am (UTC)
ext_67111: (Default)
From: [identity profile] holycitygirl.livejournal.com
OH

MY

GOD

This was so good. You painted such a vivid picture with this fic. (I actually HEARD my grandmother's screen door slamming). I don't know if it IS because it is soooo southern and we've lived it or if you are just that good.

But I certainly don't want to hear anymore about you not having any words.

I still remember the time when I was around 8 and we had a really rainy summer and the frogs came out. My best friend Carmella and I snuck one our pocket and brought it in the house to keep as a pet. It got loose and my mother had a fit.

Because this fic IS all things southern ---it made me feel so at home with Sawyer.

I love how you tied the two worlds, created the disaproving grandfather, and then left us hanging with Sawyer's trip to the woods. I didn't know how you were going to do it (I mean I knew you were going to turn it into something good but...) - but you did it perfectly.

And I love you.

And applaud you.

Take this as high praise from a "unique genius". lol --(I'm having that put on my business cards. )

Date: 2005-12-14 04:20 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Because this fic IS all things southern ---it made me feel so at home with Sawyer.

I think that it was the so-familiar accent and the fact that Sawyer's from my hometown that made me fall so damn hard for him.

I'd planned to do something funny with the frogs, but then I was listening to the real ones in my backyard, and I started thinking about the whispers, and it turned into something dark, instead. I'm so glad it came out to your liking, anyway! That was quite a unique challenge you gave me...and don't doubt it, you ARE a genius! :D

Date: 2005-12-14 06:24 pm (UTC)
ext_67111: (Default)
From: [identity profile] holycitygirl.livejournal.com
I won't. I promise. :D

And you definately went in the right direction if you were looking for the path of Lee approval - because that was SOOO good.

Date: 2005-12-14 04:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] eponine119.livejournal.com
This story is astonishing.

It fits very much into that realm of Southern Writers, with all the charm and voice and nuance of Eudora Welty or Flannery O'Connor or Carson McCullers. It's so good, and just the right edge of creepy.

I just love it. You're back, baby!!! :)

Date: 2005-12-14 04:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you love it! I was afraid this one might be a little bit *too* Southern for you. ;) I just got back from the Smokies, and while I was there I went to the river and decided exactly which house Sawyer grew up in. Then I just had to write it. And Eudora Welty? You couldn't flatter me any more than that, because she went to college in the little town I live in now, and she's a hero around these parts! Thank you so much! :D

Date: 2005-12-14 06:46 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] deej240z.livejournal.com
Wow! This was beautiful. The imagery felt so real. And then tying it into the island. Shivers! Wonderfully done.

Date: 2005-12-14 04:32 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked it! The setting *is* real; I was just there in that spot by the river a few days ago. They say you should "write what you know," so that's what I did!

Thanks so much for reading! :D

Date: 2005-12-14 04:43 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] storydivagirl.livejournal.com
You've found your writing mojo! Yay! (that is the worst feeling in the world, I think...somewhere around the level of a harsh dumping!)

Date: 2005-12-14 05:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
It IS the worst feeling in the world, and the scariest! If it weren't for all the hand-holding and support I got from my flist the last few days, I might've quit trying altogether. You're awesome! :)

Date: 2005-12-14 07:14 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] inthekeyofd.livejournal.com
Oh I loved this, the way you tied James as a youngin' to know that he's on the island and the spooks are real and the spooks want to hurt him.

Yes, I was quite spooky because those others (and how many are there now??) are just waiting and biding their time.

Love it!

Date: 2005-12-14 08:46 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Poor Sawyer, I never can decide if he's brave or suicidal. *sigh*

This was something completely different for me, so I'm really glad you loved it! :D

Date: 2005-12-14 11:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] halfdutch.livejournal.com
That was wonderful. Such vivid descriptions. You really set the scene! And what a deft way to bring it back to the present, on the island. Loved this.

Date: 2005-12-15 01:41 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Thank you! I'm usually really bad about descriptions. I just assume that since we see the island on TV, we don't want to read descriptions of it in fic. Though that's not always true for me; I like them if they're well done. But I'm lazy, so I usually skip that part in favor of, I dunno, smut or something. ;) It's really nice to hear that when I DO try it (because I really wanted to write about where Sawyer grew up, which we haven't seen on TV), it works.

Thanks so much!!! :D

Date: 2005-12-15 12:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] strutterms.livejournal.com
Dude! How did I not notice this 'til now?!

*adds to fic hare*

Very vivid...this needs a sequel. *nods* Find out what Sawyer finds when he goes chasing them spooks...more frogs? Island monster? Jack waiting to pounce on him and fuck him stupid?

*blinks* *peers at 3rd one*

If you don't write it, I will, damn it.

*marries fic a second time for good measure* ;p

Date: 2005-12-15 01:44 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I snuck it in after everybody's bedtime last night. I was trying to meet a birthday deadline. Sorry! :)

I vote for #3. Write it! Write it!

*smooches*

Date: 2005-12-15 04:20 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] philomel.livejournal.com
Reminds me of the second to last time I was in Georgia and heard a chorus of post-rain frogs all night long. Definitely a spooky yet beautiful sound.

This is graceful and utterly engaging. Brilliant yarn. :)

Date: 2005-12-15 04:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I'm so glad you liked it! And yes, it was inspired by the frogs that lull me to sleep almost every night in the summertime. It's our own deep-South version of the Whispers. :)

Thanks so much for reading! :D

Date: 2005-12-15 05:51 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hkath.livejournal.com
Sorry it took me so long to comment! You won the dubious honour of being the first person I read today and the last one I commented on (I need to find a better system, seriously).

So glad you're back!! And boy, are you! This was incredibly atmospheric, really dark and so very much in tune with sight, sound, touch. Sometimes you just hit it, girl. James' grandfather hating him for looking like his dad, and the way they interacted... that was almost as haunting to me as the creepy night sounds. Good job!

*latches on to you, doesn't let you escape, ever*

Date: 2005-12-15 04:35 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
What a wonderful review! This fic was something different for me, and I guess I needed that to kick-start the writing again. I'm glad you mentioned the part about James' grandfather. I want to come back to this story later and explore that relationship some more. I'm so glad you liked it!!!

*big, big hugs*

Date: 2005-12-15 09:13 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] velena.livejournal.com
What a cool fic! I love the image of all those frogs stuck on a tree, and the thought of Sawyer all huddled up under that blanket on a porch. I could almost hear the sounds echoing. I really like young!Sawyer fic, so thanks for feeding me. :)

Date: 2005-12-15 10:08 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I love the way we're inventing a history for Sawyer. I've been writing a lot of young-Sawyer fics lately, and I've already got an idea for another one. I'm so glad you liked this! :D

Date: 2005-12-16 12:01 am (UTC)
themoononastick: refract (sawyer s2 (icon by sunkissed44))
From: [personal profile] themoononastick
Wow! I absolutely love this. You paint such a vivid picture, I could see him in my head so clearly, hiding in his tent as a child, listening to the noises around him - wonderfully done.
And I love the way that you made it all come full circle with him listening to the whispering from the jungle. Brilliant.

Date: 2005-12-16 07:49 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Thank you! I really wondered if my non-Southern friends would be able to take all the Southern dialect I used in this one. I'm so glad to know that you liked it! :D

Date: 2005-12-18 02:12 pm (UTC)
meredith44: Can't talk, I'm reading (Sawyer thought)
From: [personal profile] meredith44
The problem with not reading fic for awhile is when I go back to doing so, everyone has already reviewed, saying anything I might have thought to say (and saying it better than I would have). *sigh* Well, I've heard that any feedback is good, so I'll just repeat what the others said... I liked the imagery and the background you set up for Sawyer. What I liked most of all was the way you tied in the background to the current situation. Nice.

Date: 2005-12-18 07:26 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Yes, any feedback is good! I just like to know that people are still reading. And this one was so different, for me, that I was kind of insecure about it. So, thank you so much for the nice comment! :D

Date: 2006-02-16 03:30 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] jenthegypsy.livejournal.com
Well, here I am, all the way over here in Decemberland, and what do I find? A real fine little piece of story, and a girl from my home town to boot! How small a world does that make it?

What a wonderful ficlet! Spent many a summer on the Little Pigeon wadin' in the cold mountain water and screechin' away from water moccasins, which were probably never really there, with my mean sisters letting me get to the middle of the swinging bridge that ran across it and then making it shake and bounce and sway until I sat right down and cried in terror. Ah, yeah - loved that river. Can't hardly find it any more, now that Townsend runs all the wall-to-wall way to Gatlinburg - now that it's the haze of car exhaust that puts the "smoke" in the Smokies.

*sigh*

But you have the tone oh-so-right. Mamaw and Papaw and tent quilts on the front porch, screen doors slammin and raccoons out in the yard. And little James, playin' possum, cause if you play it long enough just maybe the pain will give up on you and just go away....

I love this fic - what a surprise that I would - and I love that you are a East Tennessee girl. Just how special is that?

Date: 2006-02-18 03:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I know you're off in the Emerald Isle right now, so I didn't come by right away to answer this, but squee! That makes me so happy! You've probably seen the very spot where this fic takes place! Last summer I looked around the river to find the house that I thought Sawyer would've grown up in, and I vowed to write it, and this is the result. I used the same setting for a grown-up (read, NC-17) J/S post-rescue AU fic, set on a rock out in the middle of the river and using the same house. It's locked right now thanks to some trouble with trolls *sigh*, but maybe I can bring it back out into the open someday.

I am so excited to find a fellow Knoxvillian on my flist! Um, go Vols? ;D

Date: 2006-02-27 02:28 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] zenana7.livejournal.com
Yay for lost fic awards leading me to stories I missed.

And how oddly prescient this one is, eh? Tree frogs! Eerie! TPTB writers couldn't have read this, could they? Naaah!

Well-written, tightly crafted story. Just, great!

Date: 2006-02-27 05:55 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
I didn't realize you hadn't seen this one! I'm glad you found it. :D

I'm going with coincidence on this one. But yeah, it's a big damn coincidence! Now we know where his issued with tree frogs comes from, LOL!

*smooch!*

Date: 2006-11-08 11:37 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com
Aha - I found it! (think there's an error in your link from [livejournal.com profile] smokey_verse) So now will read this one, delaying leaving half-finished fb for Rivals, and do this in timeline order, or story order, or however you choose to term it (sorry - I can be horribly anal).

"Even if there was, spooks ain't for hidin' from. Spooks are for facin' down, lookin' straight in the eye."
Oooh, grandfather is a tough old coot, isn't he?

"I ain't hidin'." James scowled. "I'm just listenin.'
Bravo! I can see that mini-Sawyer glowering!

(The same kind of frogs that slithered up and down his bedroom windows after they'd had a spell of hard rain.
Must ask - do they really climb up the windows?)

"Tree frogs. See what they're doin'?"
*blinks* Uh oh. Am sort of bouncing for the frog-backstory, while thinking how this sets up all sorts of unpleasant connections regarding frogs in James' head. Poor future island frog.

I really like the ending of this, how you've used the grandfather's sneering words in Sawyer's memory as a sort of talisman he's invoking to psych himself up. It's good to know his papaw's gruffness helped him to grow stronger.

Date: 2006-11-09 12:00 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
First, THANK YOU for telling me about the error. NaNo makes Allie even more scatterbrained than usual, and that's saying a lot! It's all fixed now.

Must ask - do they really climb up the windows?

Yes, they really do! We have tons of them in Mississippi (where I live now), and they slither up and down my kitchen windows every time we have a rainy spell.

There's a story behind this fic, wanna hear it? I'll tell it anyway. About this time last year some tree frogs had an orgy in my hot tub and spawned hundreds of tadpoles. The creatures lived there happily until the first cold snap came along, and then we had a dilemma. We had to run the jets so the water wouldn't freeze, but running the jets would make tadpole soup. How to save the tadpoles? I brought this problem to my ever-helpful flist, who laughed their asses off. [livejournal.com profile] holycitygirl said she didn't have any advice for me, but I should fic Sawyer getting killed by tree frogs. (Now mind you, this was MONTHS before we saw the frog-murder on Lost), so I did! Sorta, only without the "killing" part. As for the RL tadpoles, we scooped 'em out and relocated 'em to a pond, where I hope they lived happily ever after. ;)

THANK YOU for catching up with this from the beginning. I think there's actually going to be a third prologue (yeah, I get carried away easily) to make the transition between "Third Saturday in October" and "Spectrum" a little bit clearer, but if you decide to go ahead and read "Spectrum" I don't think it'll make that much difference as all of the parts I've posted so far have can be read as stand-alones. And...I'm talking your ear off, aren't I?...but thanks for signing up! I'm enjoying getting to know you! ♥

Date: 2006-11-13 12:24 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] hendercats.livejournal.com
I can be quite slow, especially when behind, but now that we'll not be getting any new episodes for a while am likely to be better at getting caught up ... I hope.

Tadpoles in the hottub - what a marvelous story! (but suppose it was rather frustrating when they were actually there)

And...I'm talking your ear off, aren't I?
Nah. No worries there!

Date: 2006-11-16 02:19 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] gemjam.livejournal.com
Sorry I'm so behind on your NaNo stuff. It's because I missed this the first time around so I wanted to come back and read it and then I wanted to reread Spectrum because it's been so long since I read that and then I just failed to actually catch up on anything but I'm here now and I shall try and work my way through the rest of it shortly.

This was really good, I loved the atmosphere here, the dark and the whispers. I love the resentment that James' grandfather felt towards him because he saw the failure of his own son every time he looked at James, that rang very true and also explains some of Sawyer's views towards himself. I love how he's trying to be brave here, following his grandfather to face his spooks, but it all winds up being for nothing and he just feels like he's being made fun of again.

I love how years later, even though pretty much everything has changed, he's still that little boy somewhere inside and he still hears the spooks calling. Really effective ending.

Date: 2006-11-16 06:53 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Hey, don't worry about being slow. I know I've got more than one of yours to catch up on!

It was actually really good timing, because I was stuck on a part mid-way through the story I'm working on, and by reminding me of Spooks you showed me the direction I want to go, so ♥! Thank you!

Sawyer really is still that little boy, isn't he? I guess that's why we all want to hug him so. well, part of the reason, anyway. ;)

I'm so glad you read and liked!

Date: 2006-11-27 05:31 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cynthia-arrow.livejournal.com
You can check my userinfo, but I'm pretty sure I can claim I wasn't around when you published this originally. :) I'm sorta glad, because I get to enjoy it now like it's shiny and new.

Dear, this is gorgeously written. Really. It feels less like fanfic and more like just plain ol' fic to me (if you know what I mean, and if that doesn't sound awful to say). I'm just always astounded by some of your phrasing and word choice, so much so in this story that I hesitate to start cutting and pasting phrases. But this one's a good example:

The moon was so high that it almost looked like daytime, except that the water of the Little Pigeon River was blacker than the sky as it slid and gleamed over massive dark rocks.

Anyway, this piece sets a nice tone. (I appreciate your southernisms, too, BTW.) I'll be happy to see where you take our boys. :)

Date: 2006-11-30 04:07 am (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Thank you so much! Sorry I'm late replying; life sidetracked me a bit. I'm so glad you liked this; it always makes me happy to hear what my Southern friends think. And yay! I'm glad someone else understands "mamaw" and "papaw" and Tennessee-speak! Hard to believe that this one little fic that was supposed to be a one-shot grew into a whole 'verse. It really makes me so happy to know you're reading and liking. *hugs*

Date: 2008-04-14 12:34 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] cleuchi.livejournal.com
OMG, that was impressing! It gave me the goosebumps as I was reading it. I loved how you managed to capture their special, thick accent in the writing, the fact that James' papaw hates him because he's not his real son and also because he thinks he's as coward as his actual one. And the detail of the frogs ♥
As soon as I have a good amount of time, I'll start reading your novella :)

Date: 2008-04-14 11:27 pm (UTC)
From: [identity profile] alliecat8.livejournal.com
Oh, thank you so much for reading this and liking it! When the lostquickfics community came along and the rules said we could post old fic, it took me a while to find some that hadn't been made obsolete by canon. (Hee, this one was actually SUPPORTED by canon -- I wrote it months before the frog-squishing scene in "One of Them.") Don't feel obligated to read the looonnngggg novella -- it's Jack/Sawer NC-17, so this innocent prologue is a little bit deceptive ;) -- but it's linked if you ever find yourself in the mood for a not-so-quick fic! Thanks again. :)
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